What reasons-evidence, data, or examples-do you offer to support your “I say”?
Throughout my essay on joy, I tend to try to tie not only my ideas but the sources to my real life. My ideas are a part of my “I say” but aren’t quite as substantial to my claims as my personal experience is. To support my use of I say, I can use my personal experience examples. I spoke about my grandfather’s death, the transition of relationships with people in my life during my senior year, seeing my grandmother’s life through mine, as well as some minor details where I could relate to a source. My strongest “I say” claim is when I spoke on my grandfather’s death. It was where I could relate my life the most to the sources I used. One key sentence that supports my “I say” is, “My grandparents are the joy of my family. Their belly laughs, out of pocket sentences, and old-fashioned charm are the things that brought my family together. Getting to be somewhere as an entire family and getting to reminisce on all our memories with my grandfather really put into perspective for me, along with my grandmother, that we can experience joy in even the worst of situations” (Carsetti 3). I was able to use my personal experience of getting to be around my grandparents during my childhood and use it to show that even when our lives were altered by the death of my grandfather, I was able to find joy with my family through each other. My other points where my voice was really expressive was when discussing the diversity and division because of it coming to an end when my classmates and I were nearing graduation or talking about how having to find joy through my hardships of transitioning into college life. I am constantly backing and each source I use with my ideas and never not miss the opportunity to use my own thoughts and input into my writing.
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